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    Extraordinary World

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    Post by Envy Sun Jan 13, 2013 2:21 pm

    This was one of my favorite poems that I wrote around three years ago. Not as descriptive as it could have been, but it was three years ago, I'm just happy I was into writing back then.

    Extraordinary World

    ... Just black... that's all I can see...
    In this ordinary life, nothing is accepting
    Nothing is right
    I want to go off to someplace amazing
    A world of falling snow and shadow covered trees
    A place where the air is calm and quiet
    A place where the sun barely shines
    Where a light blue hue cuts through the clouds from the horizon
    I can walk in peace there
    A place where the soft snow will fall upon my face
    A dark path of falling snowflakes with the trees and the shadows casting over me
    A land of absolute silence and snow
    In the first part of my extraordinary world...
    One again back in my ordinary life
    The ordinary people walking down the pathways of their ordinary lives
    I close my eyes and go off again
    I am lying on a grassy field, the wind blowing softly through my hair
    Resting my head on my hands and gazing up into the night
    The pure black sky lit up with the stars and constellations aglow
    Tall, graceful and powerful flowing trees all around me
    Their softly glowing pink petals floating gracefully down towards the ground spinning and waving slowly and silently
    Still up in the sky my eyes keep wondering
    I want to stay in this world together with the snow and the stars forever
    I know that I cannot, it is but a vague dream...
    A dream which I can only wish to eventually live
    I open my eyes once again back in the ordinary world
    The people with their money, their lies and their transgressions
    I will just go off into my own world...
    and smile....
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    Post by skeletorissatan Sun Jan 13, 2013 4:47 pm

    rulez pretty hard my man, well written, i liked the run on sentence on the last line

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